If I was BIlly Collins

1. Did you purposely choose to make some of your metaphors ridiculous?
        My metaphors are not ridiculous they are the truth. I decided to write this poem to my beloved to describe how I think of her. I am merely being honest and honesty is the main ingredient in any relationship. I identified my beloved as being the "bread in the knife", also the "crystal goblet and the wine". This is because she believes she is everything (especially in this relationship). To her the sun does not rise until she gets up. So since she thinks this way I decided to tell her what she is and what she isn't. My beloved "isn't the pine scent in the air". She does not smell that good. I would describe her scent as "the fish under the bridge". My metaphors aren't ridiculous they are just the truth.
2. When did you feel all of these different feelings toward your lover?
      When that awful aroma around her traveled across the room and up into my nostrils. But there are also good things about my lover. For instance she "is not a house of cards" that can fall down so easily. She is a strong woman that sticks to her beliefs.
3. Why do you believe the original poem failed?
       I believe the original poem failed because it doesn't quite capture the reality of a relationship. Although their are two people in a relationship, the two people tend to be more selfish and ask what they are getting out of the relationship instead of what they should be putting in. That is why I rewrote this poem and described not only my beloved but myself.